Grammar

I changed this sentence in several ways. I replace ômostö with ôsomeö, because there are only three children listed as ômostö and the number does not agree with word choice. I also put the childrenÆs names in parentheses, which I find more fluid than the dash. I also changed the order of the ôBarnwellsö and the description of them as an ôolder coupleö as I find that the opposite way is wordy and a run-on sentence.

2) The children find them so not just because Mrs. Barnwell takes the time to help them with their homework whenever their parents are at work.

I changed this sentence and added a subject because it was a fragmented sentence without one as originally written.

3) The children also feel a sense of security due to the BirdwellÆs because of several other reasons: Saturdays in the park, snacks Mr. Barnwell makes once in a while in the late afternoon, and the woodworking projects they encourage the kids to start that are sometimes visible in their front yard.

I changed this sentence in several ways. Once again a subject was added to the original because it was a fragment as written. Further, the lengthy listing of reasons was set-off by a colon in order to make the sentence easier to read and less clumsy in structure. ôStartö replaced ôbeginö to keep the correct tense.

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