sed so was broken into two complete sentences. (9) He tells me stories about my mother. (Correct). No revision necessary. (10) The idea being that the stories we tell are important parts of the real lives we lead. (SF) Revision: He tells me stories about my mother, the idea being that the stories we tell are important parts of the real lives we lead. This fragment was added to sentence nine and now makes a complete and correct sentence. (11) After a few moments, he looks at me directly and leans in closer. (Correct). This sentence requires no modification and is correct. (12) In a clear, quiet voice he says that in our stories, we can live with complete abandon. (CS) Revision: In a clear, quiet voice he says that in our stories we can live with complete abandon. This sentence took out the unnecessary comma between ôstoriesö and ôweö in the original sentence. (13) In life, we must proceed slowly, gradually. (CS) (14) Primarily with balance. (SF) (15) Never with insensitivity. (SF) Revision (13, 14 & 15): In life we must proceed slowly and gradually, primarily with balance and judgment but never with insensitivity. The comma splice and two sentence fragments in sentences 13-15 were combined as one complete sentence.
The American family is not in the state of crisis generally promoted in the media and by politicians. The high rate of divorce is typically cited as one of the major concerns about the future of AmericaÆs families. However, in The American Family, Stephanie Coontz explains why AmericaÆs families are actually not as poorly off as they are often portrayed, especially in compa
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