Literature, Sociology & Grammar
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(1) He looks frail, thin. (CS) Revised: He looks frail and thin. Sentence needed a conjunction added. (2) Almost vulnerable. (SF) Revised: He looks almost vulnerable. Sentence as written lacked a subject. (3) The baggy gray sweater I gave him for his birthday is loosely pulled around him like a cape his shoulders are stooped. (FS) Revised: The baggy gray sweater I have him for his birthday is loosely pulled around him like a cape. Sentence lacked a comma and a conjunction so was broken into two. (4) And he holds a book. (SF) Revised: His shoulders are stooped, and he holds a book. I added the second part of sentence three to the fragment in sentence four to make it a complete sentence. (5) There is a sound, however, in my fatherÆs voice it is a tone of tired strength. (CS) Revised: There is a sound in my fatherÆs voice; however, it is a tone of tired strength. The conjunctive adverb was not punctuated or positioned correctly. (6) We sit alone at the kitchen table only a few hours after the funeral. (FS) We sit alone at the kitchen table, only a few hours after the funeral. A comma was needed as it was a comma fused sentence. (7) ôFrom day to day, we all must wear our painful experiences as a sing to others,ö he says with the vigor of pride and past victories, reading from the journal heÆs kept for the past fifty years, his constant companion. (FS) Revised: ôFrom day to day, we all must wear our painful ex
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zed in warehouse-like facilities without compassion. The rate of unwed mothers increased by threefold in the period from 1940 to 1958 (Coontz 49). School violence, typically labeled a modern phenomenon was also rampant according to Coontz, ôLIFE reported that urban teachers were being terrorized by their studentsö (49).
The media was also responsible for creating the homogenized and always-happy image of the American family in popular television shows like Leave It to Beaver. In such shows families were portrayed as well-off, happy and able to enjoy a high quality daily lifestyle. Coontz argues such is not the case with more women suffering from anxiety and depression in the era and poverty was ômore widespread than in the worst of our last three recessionsö (49). Fewer women worked outside of the home in the 1950s and few men took an active role in caring for the home and children.
Today, families are much better off according to Coontz. More women are working and women and men now share a more equal responsibility at work and at home. Coontz reports that nearly half (49%) of married couples report sharing childcare responsibilities equally (51). Today youth violence is under control and AmericaÆs youth are as safe as
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Approximate Word count = 2073
Approximate Pages = 8 (250 words per page)
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