(1) He looks frail, thin. (CS) Revised: He looks frail and thin. Sentence needed a conjunction added. (2) Almost vulnerable. (SF) Revised: He looks almost vulnerable. Sentence as written lacked a subject. (3) The baggy gray sweater I gave him for his birthday is loosely pulled around him like a cape his shoulders are stooped. (FS) Revised: The baggy gray sweater I have him for his birthday is loosely pulled around him like a cape. Sentence lacked a comma and a conjunction so was broken into two. (4) And he holds a book. (SF) Revised: His shoulders are stooped, and he holds a book. I added the second part of sentence three to the fragment in sentence four to make it a complete sentence. (5) There is a sound, however, in my fatherÆs voice it is a tone of tired strength. (CS) Revised: There is a sound in my fatherÆs voice; however, it is a tone of tired strength. The conjunctive adverb was not punctuated or positioned correctly. (6) We sit alone at the kitchen table only a few hours after the funeral. (FS) We sit alone at the kitchen table, only a few hours after the funeral. A comma was needed as it was a comma fused sentence. (7) ôFrom day to day, we all must wear our painful experiences as a sing to others,ö he says with the vigor of pride and past victories, reading from the journal heÆs kept for the past fifty years, his constant companion. (FS) Revised: ôFrom day to day, we all must wear our painful experiences as a sign to others,ö he says with the vigor of pride and past victories. He is reading from the journal heÆs kept for the past fifty years, his constant companion. Sentence needed split into two. (8) ôHere then is a glimpse of the sign I send to you,ö he says, however he still smiles and speaks of healing, happiness, and the future. (FS) Revised: Here then is a glimpse of the sign I send to you,ö he says. However, he still smiles and speaks of healing, happiness, and the future. The sentence was fu...